To start my first post with dully decorated banal self-introduction, my name is Hansol Jeong who is now a frosh of KMLA.
However, this time, to deviate from the common-style of TOEFL writing that we are going to confront for over hundreds and hundreds of times, I am going to make a different post; which is sincere and out-of-format. Actually, my name and affiliation do not represent any of my identity, do they?
So, let's talk about my identity. Although I have already mentioned that the affiliation might not be such an important factor in building one's identity, the school KMLA did play a significant role in the formation of my identity, for it was the space I spent my whole days. I have changed a lot struggling a half-of-the-year in this school, and was able to set my identity through comparison with friends.
Frankly speaking, although I met so many talented students in this school, I was able to gain self-esteem, not only the depression. Before entering the school, I suffered from inferiority complex and the students in my age from other regions with their geniuses were felt to be formidable monsters. However, actually competing (and joining) those visualized monsters were such a intriguing experiences. They were quite friendly and nice, and it was not impossible to study with them. I felt the wider world with diversity and got my self-esteem.
I was greatly interested in Western History and the school allowed us some place to develop our aptitudes. I have never taken such an interesting class which is comparable to those classes I've taken in the school. Also, I found interest in writing papers on the basis of research done by myself. I strengthened my dream to be a scholar.
What preoccupied me was the problem with my math ability. Unfortunately, my math grade was far lower than the average and now I'm striving to raise my math ability, although it is quite harsh. In contrast, I "believed" that my English ability was at least above the average. I had little difficulty in reading scholastic books in English as well as writing and speaking. (but the listening was an exception) However, taking the English lecture of Mr.Moon, I was greatly frustrated, because I'd never got grade over 4.5 from 5.0 for my essays throughout the whole semester.
I was shocked and even bought an essays collections from a senior. I was able to categorized my problem in writing essays in following order.
First, I didn't follow the structure Mr.Moon had instructed us. For example, I got 0.5 point cut because I wrote introduction for two paragraphs and wrote the thesis statement in the end of the second paragraph.
Second, I made numerous minute grammatical errors, whether they were misspelling, inappropriate usage of the articles('a' or 'the'), or the wrong usage of the verbs. I didn't get any grammatical lecture until now, and I suppose that led me into the trouble.
Last but not least was the absence of revision. I tended to write essays in accordance with improvised ideas or opinions, mostly without elaborated outlines. As a result, after writing an essay, I was too tired to recheck it, or sometimes was scared of revising it, for it was written without planning, and even if I could think of better thesis or find errors while revising it, I thought it would be impossible to fix it. This surely is a bad habit, and because of this, I've made so many ridiculous mistakes. I think this definitely is a most urgent problem is my writing style.
Thus, my agenda for the new semester in essay writing is to overcome these problems and develop my ability to express my opinions more properly.
Frankly speaking, although I met so many talented students in this school, I was able to gain self-esteem, not only the depression. Before entering the school, I suffered from inferiority complex and the students in my age from other regions with their geniuses were felt to be formidable monsters. However, actually competing (and joining) those visualized monsters were such a intriguing experiences. They were quite friendly and nice, and it was not impossible to study with them. I felt the wider world with diversity and got my self-esteem.
I was greatly interested in Western History and the school allowed us some place to develop our aptitudes. I have never taken such an interesting class which is comparable to those classes I've taken in the school. Also, I found interest in writing papers on the basis of research done by myself. I strengthened my dream to be a scholar.
What preoccupied me was the problem with my math ability. Unfortunately, my math grade was far lower than the average and now I'm striving to raise my math ability, although it is quite harsh. In contrast, I "believed" that my English ability was at least above the average. I had little difficulty in reading scholastic books in English as well as writing and speaking. (but the listening was an exception) However, taking the English lecture of Mr.Moon, I was greatly frustrated, because I'd never got grade over 4.5 from 5.0 for my essays throughout the whole semester.
I was shocked and even bought an essays collections from a senior. I was able to categorized my problem in writing essays in following order.
First, I didn't follow the structure Mr.Moon had instructed us. For example, I got 0.5 point cut because I wrote introduction for two paragraphs and wrote the thesis statement in the end of the second paragraph.
Second, I made numerous minute grammatical errors, whether they were misspelling, inappropriate usage of the articles('a' or 'the'), or the wrong usage of the verbs. I didn't get any grammatical lecture until now, and I suppose that led me into the trouble.
Last but not least was the absence of revision. I tended to write essays in accordance with improvised ideas or opinions, mostly without elaborated outlines. As a result, after writing an essay, I was too tired to recheck it, or sometimes was scared of revising it, for it was written without planning, and even if I could think of better thesis or find errors while revising it, I thought it would be impossible to fix it. This surely is a bad habit, and because of this, I've made so many ridiculous mistakes. I think this definitely is a most urgent problem is my writing style.
Thus, my agenda for the new semester in essay writing is to overcome these problems and develop my ability to express my opinions more properly.
